Strawberry Wheat label critique.

Schnitzengiggle · 07-24-2010, 01:28 AM

So I threw together this label, please give me your feedback, any constructive criticism is welcome.

EDIT: #3(7/30/10)
Here is the final outcome from this label design, I don't think I'm gonna fuss with it any more since I am satisfied with the label in its current state. Thank you all for your helpful and constructive criticisms, feel free to continue to critique this label and I can incorporate those ideas into my next design.

EDIT: #1

EDIT: #2
Per the suggestions I've edited the label. I have made it approximately 5"x3", as you can see I paragraphed the description content, and made a sidebar with a border, as well as moved the sunburst within the description sidebar.

So what do you think?

Please keep the critique coming!

**Brewham** · 07-24-2010, 03:27 AM

The label is more than worthy. How's the beer?

DarkNoonBrewer · 07-24-2010, 03:42 AM

Awesome! Do all your labels have the flame thing around the vital stats? if it were in plain print, it would leave the eye on the coolness of the strawberry wheat reef thingy... really cool. The description makes my mouth water!

Schnitzengiggle · 07-24-2010, 04:01 PM

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Originally Posted by Brewham

The label is more than worthy. How's the beer?

LOL, I have yet to brew it, my brewday has been put on hold for 2 weekends now.

I had to do something brewing related!

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Originally Posted by DarkNoonBrewer

Awesome! Do all your labels have the flame thing around the vital stats? if it were in plain print, it would leave the eye on the coolness of the strawberry wheat reef thingy... really cool. The description makes my mouth water!

This is the first label I have put together in a while. Most of my labels have been corny and funny like the "What you talkin' bout Willis" a Gary COleman Tribute Ale (Belgian Dark Strong). I thought I'd try to put a label together that would actually make someone look at it and say, now that's a neat label.

As for the flaming sun around the vitals, that was a last minute addition because that side of the label looked lonely with only plain print there.

I hope to brew this next weekend, it will be a 10 gallon batch because I have failed to brew the wife omething she wants in a while. She asked for a Strawberry beer, similar to what a nearby brewpub offers seasonally dubbed Strawberry Lightning. To me the brewpub's beer has a artificial flavor to it, the may very well use extract for flavoring, I have always use real fruit in my fruit beers, and they just seem to taste so much better. It gives them a tartness that extract lacks.

Thanks for the comments!

Cheers!

Noontime · 07-24-2010, 06:49 PM

The label is great; all the colors work very well together. My only 2 suggestions (actually just things to think about) would be moving the block of text over to the right a little. It's really jammed in the corner and might look more comfortable and pleasing to the eye if it had a little space around it and giving the label as a whole a bit of a frame. The only other thing would be darkening the shadow of the broken glass brewery...make it a bit more contrasty. It's extremely subtle...which is great if that's what you're going for.

Great job and good luck getting the beer actually brewing!

Schnitzengiggle · 07-25-2010, 09:26 AM

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Originally Posted by Noontime

My only 2 suggestions (actually just things to think about) would be moving the block of text over to the right a little. It's really jammed in the corner and might look more comfortable and pleasing to the eye if it had a little space around it and giving the label as a whole a bit of a frame.

Great job and good luck getting the beer actually brewing!

Thanks for the positive feedback!

Exactly which block of text are you speaking of...the title, the description, or the vitals (lower right hand corner)?

Please respond, as I am truly intrestd in your critique!

Cheers!

Noontime · 07-25-2010, 12:50 PM

The description text in the lower left is what I was referring to. Every other componant of the design seems to be floating on the sunny background while that block of text seems to be achored in the corner. There may be no other way of doing it...just an observation; to me being that close to the edge kind of attaches it to the rectangular boundary of the label instead of being something inside the boundary...if that makes any sense. Again...just a subtle observasion.

This label really communicates "refreshing!"

SumnerH · 07-25-2010, 02:58 PM

That's very nice! The ray-burst effect is pretty similar to something I'm working on now.

I know you said to ignore the typo, but there are actually 2 so I figured I'd make sure you got a chance to fix 'em both before you print these. "acrisp" should be 2 words, "maount" should be "amount".

Schnitzengiggle · 07-25-2010, 06:00 PM

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Originally Posted by SumnerH

That's very nice! The ray-burst effect is pretty similar to something I'm working on now.

I know you said to ignore the typo, but there are actually 2 so I figured I'd make sure you got a chance to fix 'em both before you print these. "acrisp" should be 2 words, "maount" should be "amount".

Thanks for pointing those out, I totally missed the "amount" until my wife pointed it out, I will update the picture and make a slight change to the text that noontime suggested to see if that makes the text more interesting.

Schnitzengiggle · 07-26-2010, 07:42 PM

Final edit of photo is located in post number one. I made some minor changes per your suggestions. Keep the critique coming!